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Post  demon938 on Sun Jan 17, 2010 8:38 pm

((Well if you guys know the series you can definitely understand my story.))
I am a Saiyan sent from planet Vegeta to earth to actually destroy it but I hit my head and forget my mission to destroy the planet and so, I started living a peaceful life.
Just then the person who took care of me (my grandpa) died and just before dying he told me about Master Roshi.
((BUT HERE IS A TWIST))
Just before he died, my grandpa told me a secret;
When he found me in the jungle in the spaceship, just a few days later he saw another similar UFO crash but by the time he reached the UFO the baby in it or WHATEVER in it had disappeared.
So grandpa thought that there is still another saiyan or something not totally human present on this planet.
My plan now is to train under the Great Master Roshi and find out WHO or WHAT landed on this planet with me.
WISH ME LUCK!

Zeny: 150
PL: 40
STR:10
END:10
AGI:10
SPR:10


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Re: The New Begnning [Approved]

Post  Korn✔ on Sun Jan 17, 2010 11:39 pm

Try making this post atleast 1 paragraph long and work on your grammer. It will be a good practice because many other things in the RPG require a minimum of 300 words. The grammer shouldn't be perfect but good enough for people to understand it later.
Edit your post and I'll approve you ^^
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Post  demon938 on Tue Jan 19, 2010 9:47 pm

Done it...u can check now...
Thx

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Post  Korn✔ on Wed Jan 20, 2010 6:18 am

A lot better! The story is preety similar to Goku's but thats ok Smile
I also edited your message a bit so it will look more proper with the grammer and stuff. I added double brackets "(())" whenever there was a out-of-character text (something you tells us thee isn't related to the story) and I changed it so it is all in written in past time(Roleplays are mostly written in past time like it's a story that already happened).
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