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Balthor [Approved]

Post  ssj3 on Sat Jan 23, 2010 5:22 pm

A new sun rised on planet new Vegeta and the saiyan named Balthor woke up in the desert.The area was inhabitated by saibamen and aliens.Balthor was now 20 years old.....it was a long time when he's
homeplanet Vegeta was destroyed.Balthor escaped with a spaceship and traveled 10 months in space.
The planet's atmosphere melted his ship and Balthor crashed in the middle of a desert.He flyed
beyond the sand and rocks and sensed a new powerlevel of 1000 and stopped.Balthor's powerlevel was 1300 so he took the challenge and flew with full speed against the threat.He noticed that it was a saibaman searching for food for it's friends.He powered up to the
max (2000)and threw some blasts at the saibaman.It noticed Balthor and jumped away from Balthor's attacks
and countered with a beam that missed and destroyed a hill.Balthor dodged the second beam but the third hit him and blew him away to the rocks. - NOW YOU WILL PAY!.Balthor yelled and blew the rocks away with one shot.The saibaman made a big mistake; It hurt Balthors saiyan pride and was going to
pay for that.Balthor used his speed and kicked the air out of the saibaman.With a fast move he used his fist to send him to the rocks with high speed.He looked at the pile of ruin and spotted the green creature in it.Balthor grabbed it's leg and throwed the saibaman high in to the air.
- It's time to finish this!HAAAAAA!.Then he fired a deadly barrage of energy to the saibaman
and it exploded in to pieces.Balthor powered down and flew to continue his joyrney in the wilderness.

Zeny: 150
PL: 40
STR:10
END:10
AGI:13
SPR:7
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Re: Balthor [Approved]

Post  Korn✔ on Sun Jan 24, 2010 9:40 am

Approved!
But next time make the PL in your roleplays match your real one Razz
And some tips for a better roleplay:
Aside from small misspellings like "throwed" which should be "threw" it's kind of ok.
If someone is speaking put it in -> ".." for example:
- NOW YOU WILL PAY! should have been - > -"Now you will pay!"
Thats it, have fun!
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